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The young boy just wanted to hold her tight
    As he felt her amber hair flutter about in the breeze
        Looks scattered timidly, unrestrained heartbeats faded away
            This young adventurer finally found the fragrance he'd die for.

 Putrid seas of despair became Twilight's holdings
    Here comes victorious Dawn, hammering her flowered flag into
        The possessed boy's skull. This new Freedom he was blessed,
            Kept running through his mind as if he has lived thousands of lives.

He craved her all night long, a fellow bottle in hand
    Waiting made his night last longer than eternal Oblivion   
         Howling as a lost soul, until he smells her again,
            Beautiful hangover.

The shy boy was reeked of youth's insouciance,
    On his fresh field will grow seeds of morbidity,
        This exquisite scent will haunt him for such a long time
            So young, already tortured, the stubborn boy sure won't lack love.
Sometimes there's pollution, sometimes you smell fragrances you've never smelled before, sometimes her perfume makes you finally realize you're already in love.

It was a very lovely text at first. Then my twisted mind got the upper hand.
(so many words I wanted to use don't exist in English ;_; )
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great poem. Just the right length without the risk of being bloated. I love how you took that sense of smell and weaved into the poem with such adept imagery and well chosen vocabulary. It's a shame sometimes when there are words not in the English language to use.
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Length is definitely something I always consider while writing! I'm glad you enjoyed it though, it means my efforts weren't in vain. :D
And yeah, English is sometimes frustrating but on the contrary it's very convenient. 
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a wonderful poem!

I like the structure, it's not too long and not too short.
The imagery is layered and intriguing, but also this poem evokes senses of smell, touch, and hearing.
It's memorable and well written. 

Great job! :D
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ehehe thanks mate! Not too short, not too long indeed. :meow:
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D 
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Eraezr Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
At first love is nice I guess.
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love is always nice! *fool*
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Eraezr Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Me when I was young: Love is nice
Life: Not so fast kiddo <evil laugh>
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Alexander-Musset Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Yes, it was so lovely at first, and then........
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And then I turned it into something disturbing. :p
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