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It all began with a smile...

The freshly awaken Camellia, morning's wonder
Highlighted even on a rubies' field
She was her own spring sun ; a mellifluous beauty

The gullible Camellia, tricked by this charming rose
Got stung to the blood, cleaned out of her inner light.
Another victim of this world's rottenness
The saddening outcome of a barbaric act.

The daughter of Nature got fouled
Reeked of the rose's stench  
Acid rain poured on this virgin sprout
And lost her blossom forever

She dreams of nightmares, craves forgetfulness
Floods of tears under the bloody moon
Her desperate and heartbreaking screams 
shatter the icy silence of the Withering Night. 

Eternity may not be long enough
For the Camellia to shed all her sorrow -
Oh ruthless Scythe! 
You sent to the skies such a pretty Camellia.


...It all ended with a bullet.
A beautiful girl. A beauty like you never saw before who ends up committing suicide, because of this trauma called rape.

Such a gruesome act should not take you down, life keeps moving on, no matter how hard it is.
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014

This one is heavy and has very sharp edges.  I think I cut myself lifting it to look inside.

I like the use of visual symmetry. I gives a sense of movement and funnels everything to the center verse.  I appreciate the metaphors of the rose's stench and the acid rain poured over the virgin sprout.

It makes me think too, how, as a society, we probably did nothing but rub salt into the wounds of this morning's wonder.  The first act of violence was from the charming rose, but was there a second act of violence perpetrated by social mores and expectations? I am speaking here from an American point of view and what I see in my own culture.

A woman's worth is not measured by some imaginary fantasy of purity.
A woman's worth is not determined by who has been between her legs.
A woman's worth is measured by what is between her ears and, especially, what lives behind her ribs.

The last is true for all people really.  I wish we had a chance to tell this to people like Camellia.   I'm sorry if this one got me thinking too much.  Camellia's story is sad.  That should be enough.

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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"A woman's worth is not measured by some imaginary fantasy of purity.
A woman's worth is not determined by who has been between her legs.
A woman's worth is measured by what is between her ears and, especially, what lives behind her ribs."
*high five*
The world needs more people like you my friend. :heart:
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
Those words are stuck in my head.  I've jotted them down in my virtual notebook. 
They may make their way out into a poem or essay or something at some point or in some form.

Of course, I could say the same thing about you.  Heart  
BTW, your Feature #11 was wonderful.  Lots of beautiful new stuff to sift through.   Thank you for finding them.
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I'm often told I could make prose out of my poems.
I always feel like I'm missing the best pieces of this website, these features are the less I can do. :(
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tsubaki-nanaseR08 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014   Artist
very tragic but deep. also, i am named after a flower. Camellia that is.
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That is such a lovely name, you're lucky. :)
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tsubaki-nanaseR08 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014   Artist
thank you. even though it's spelled differently, it's still my name.
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meanmaco12 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sad and flawless, what an amazing poem
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, these words mean a lot.
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meanmaco12 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your very welcome :)
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